Just looking for a little feedback to some lyrics my guitarist wrote, I feel like the 2nd verse should be changed a little bit.
Once more I'm thrown into the unknown
That black abyss where nothing is certain anymore
I don't know if I'll make it out alive, I don't know if I'll make it out alive
One more year you have to be apart from me
Once more I have to wait patiently
I don't know if we'll make it out alive, I don't know if we'll make it out alive.
Breath in slowly
Stay calm and focus on the problem
I know I have been forgotten.
The pieces lay at my feet, smoothed from hours of erosive worrying
Will you ever remember me? Will you remember how it used to be?
And I can't wait for you any longer
The world stops for no one person and you're no exeption
And I can't wait for you forever
You had your chance and you ruined it.
The waiting is over
Stop me if you heard this one before
Saying "it will be just fine, it will be ok, we will make now, some how, some way"
If you mean what you say then prove it to me
Show me something, show me something
Run run as fast as you can
You can never catch me, I can't change the past
Watch your world come to a grinding halt
This is my life, and it's all your fault.