[Henry Ferreira]

Gee, this is embarassing... It's my first real lyrical attempt (it's more likely a poetry, actually) and I just want to share it with someone, so if you enjoyed, leave your comment please!
This song is about nowadays' society. It tells (almost) everything I think about all this craziness we see in this world. Depression, natural disasters, murdering... I guess it's kinda heavy but anyway, just read it.



Do you believe I hear
Every moment in my mind
Angel choirs singing softly
Lyrics of Christian joy
There was always a deploy
Despite the trying, carelessly
Stalking the shadows of time
It’s not clear

Won’t fade
If they are gone
Only faith can say
Keeping scars bleeding out
No help in a paltry shout
Before it goes away
It will leave me prone
To degrade

Transmit
Electrical issues
Bloody murder screams
How many died
Escaped when they tried
Knives shattered dreams
When no one uses
To admit

Decay
The eyes are closed
For what is unpleasant
For us to be seen
Though it has always been
Sound became incessant
However, nothing exposed
There is none on this to say

The cause is not just
Not laudable to thrust
Based on forsakes
Inspired on mistakes

Many questions damn our souls
Normal people in this world of ghouls
What would save us from the litter?
What would save us from real killers?

One day we will know.

[daviddeath95]

Don't like the "only god shall know", change it to something like "one day we'll know".

[Henry Ferreira]

Originally Posted by daviddeath95

Don't like the "only god shall know", change it to something like "one day we'll know".

I haven't thought of it.... I always thought "Only God Shall Know" was a bit exaggerated, though. Thanks!

[shawn_red_eye]

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[shawn_red_eye]

[Svendsen_DgF.ja]

Pretty good, all in all a good read, keep it up !

[Prophetic]

sounds good

[Henry Ferreira]

Originally Posted by Svendsen_DgF.ja

Pretty good, all in all a good read, keep it up !

Thanks bro! I wanted to make something different and then I thought of an 8-verse with inverted rhymes as I was writing, you know?

[Henry Ferreira]

Originally Posted by Prophetic

sounds good

Thank you! However I haven't achieved to turn it into a song yet...

[Zillahx2]

Transmit
Electrical issues
Bloody murder screams
How many died
Escaped when they tried
Knives shattered dreams
When no one uses
To admit



Best part for me, I just don't understand the last line. Sort of seems out of place.

[Henry Ferreira]

Originally Posted by Zillahx2

Transmit
Electrical issues
Bloody murder screams
How many died
Escaped when they tried
Knives shattered dreams
When no one uses
To admit



Best part for me, I just don't understand the last line. Sort of seems out of place.

A little bit. See, I didn't know what could rhyme with "Issues" here. I was trying to say that there are people being assassinated because of war and things like that but the governments and the media masses all over the world don't seem to care about it, showing only the positive side of stuff. You know?

[xCoconutheadx]

I must admit I'm loving the last couple of lines. really adds the extra umph

[Henry Ferreira]

Originally Posted by xCoconutheadx

I must admit I'm loving the last couple of lines. really adds the extra umph

Thanx man! Never meant to brag, but I love the last lines as well. They're the conclusion of the whole poem, so I wanted to make it very "touching" you know...

[AsYesterday]

I imagine this being played by early Avenged Sevenfold.

[richardabol]

sounds Good