[thecurerocks182]

Sometime between sun up and sun downing
He was licked by the ultra-violent
Beaten and kicked till his eyes rolled back
For walking the same sidewalk
Then you left him in a pool of cold blood
From an open wound you stomped in his head
In the hospital his mother delivered,
He lay purple and still, twenty years later.

His eyes
His hearing
For which you could have easily crushed
I, thank you

On a stretcher with a needle in his arm
His head wilting and draped in dried blood
He held her hand for a trembling six hours
That’s when she knew he’d be okay
Did you know he was a talented musician?
That playing piano was the first love he ever knew?
While his friend’s spoke of cold intentions,
He never wanted the same for another mother

His hands
His teeth
For which you could have easily destroyed
I, thank you

After all, you could have kicked him to death,
But you only left him to die
You could have kicked him to death.
And so for this, I must thank you.

So, when you think back on that day
Five men, two women for one person
On those cold streets paved with malice
Five men, two women to unhinge a family
The way his eye socket bled and shattered;
The way his ear lacerated internally;
The way a surgeon had to sow his temple,
But your boots didn’t kick-in his chattering teeth
The way complex hands beat another human;
The way a parent worries a lost child
And I wish you children and all the love for them
But I would never wish on that child
The same way you gave mine
The same way you gave mine

After all, you could have kicked him to death,
But you only left him to die
You could have kicked him to death.
And so for this, I must thank you.
Thank you for my second chance.

[xXxst!tchxXx]

Nice :D

[gup]

damn man, some deep stuff. a strong ending. i liked the way you portrayed how you had to force yourself not to be bitter, and to instead just be grateful. keep it up

[thecurerocks182]

Originally Posted by gup

damn man, some deep stuff. a strong ending. i liked the way you portrayed how you had to force yourself not to be bitter, and to instead just be grateful. keep it up

thanks a lot. i plan on making revisions. i wrote the music and the lyrics just fell into place. if you're interested, then here's a very rough recording of the song as it is: http://soundcloud.com/ender7x77/second-chances . i just bought a new computer to handle recordings, which will be here next week :D so, until then, this is sort of a preliminary song/recording...i want to record song as a full band. once again, thanks both of you for the kind words. it means a lot.

[gup]

That's pretty bad ass man, I liked the minor changes. I think they worked in very well. The guitar is very catchy, when all the elements came together I was a little scared cause that's a little far from my taste. but after a couple lines I was diggin it for sure. very good, keep it up man

[RenaSurrenders]

cool

[FeedMe]

very nice work

[JackyKerouacy<3]

I thought that was very deep and inspiring even and in a very Jack Kerouac way I dug that man haha. At first when you mentioned the word "ultra-violent" my immediate thought was of A Clockwork Orange haha but it was a really nice piece to read and if i didn't have crapscrap internet I would definitely listen to the recording.

[thecurerocks182]

Originally Posted by gup

That's pretty bad ass man, I liked the minor changes. I think they worked in very well. The guitar is very catchy, when all the elements came together I was a little scared cause that's a little far from my taste. but after a couple lines I was diggin it for sure. very good, keep it up man

Thanks a lot. I apologize for taking so long to reply. 12hr shifts at the hospital just drains me. I hope to record a proper recording in the future with a full-band. This was me recording one take and layering it with a few vocals. I'm happy you took the time to listen and enjoyed as a result. I appreciate it :) I love writing. I just wish I had more free time to do so.

Originally Posted by JackyKerouacy<3

I thought that was very deep and inspiring even and in a very Jack Kerouac way I dug that man haha. At first when you mentioned the word "ultra-violent" my immediate thought was of A Clockwork Orange haha but it was a really nice piece to read and if i didn't have crapscrap internet I would definitely listen to the recording.

You know, I've always wanted to read On the Road, but never find myself the time to do so. Well, I never find more time from work. Thanks for taking the time to read and respond. Clockwork Orange is one of my favorite books/movies, so its definitely an inspiration. I love making allusions. Once again, thanks again for the kind response. Hopefully, by the time you are able to listen, I'll have a decent recording available.

Thanks again everyone!

[thesafeword]

Second Chances Pt. 2

it's not okay to say ******

[nickmoebus]

Very great concept for a song. Not only was it great lyrically, but the optimism you show is something very different from what else is out there. keep it up

[SilverJayStorm]

You did a nice job in writing the song!

[TreeTopsBurning]

nice dude i clicked on your link and it reminded me of bright eyes, good shit.

[thecurerocks182]

Originally Posted by nickmoebus

Very great concept for a song. Not only was it great lyrically, but the optimism you show is something very different from what else is out there. keep it up

Thanks man. I love irony. I also enjoy the utmost positivity in the most pressing situations. Human emotional strength is compelling. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks a lot for your kind words. I hope to record a more polished version of the song in the near future. I recorded the vocals in one track, so with the encouraging words written thus far I feel well inclined to record something more. Thanks again.

Originally Posted by SilverJayStorm

You did a nice job in writing the song!

Thanks a lot! I always write the music first, then the lyrics. I'm glad you liked it.

Originally Posted by TreeTopsBurning

nice dude i clicked on your link and it reminded me of bright eyes, good shit.

Bright eyes is one of my favorites. Anything mentioned in the same breath as them is an honor. I definitely strive towards the intensity demonstrated in their albums. Thanks again. As mentioned, I hope to record a more polished/whole band recording to further enhance the quality of the song. Thanks.

[ShawnHowells]

i love it