I think you've definitely improved as a reviewer since your Reptilian review (the last of yours I commented on). You make some solid points about the songs individually - you could possibly flesh these out slightly more in the future. Do try to have a point in your paragraphs, though, rather than just going through each song and picking something you like about it. For instance, Captain, We're Sinking's song-structuring is really interesting and different from a lot of 'punk' bands, so you could discuss this more and give different examples from different songs, and then also add something about each of those songs that stands out to you as you go into more detail about them.
One thing I try to do in my reviews is have a couple of key points or a general theme to them. It helps the review as a whole flow better, in my opinion, and it stops you having to break the album down so much as to say what is good about each song just to fill space.
Try to refrain from using 'I'. It's a lot less critical (and it's a pet-peeve of mine, possibly because my old English teacher said to never use 'I' in a review, but mostly because I don't care why you like the album so much, I want to read why I would like it).
In the bottom paragraph you play off your affection for this album "fanboyish", which is just an immature word (not saying you're immature, but that the word itself implies immaturity). It feels apologetic, too. Don't do that.
This album fucking rules, btw :D
Well thank you for saying what phaynes said without being a dick.
I will certainly try to focus more on making points in the future. What you said about having a single general theme in a review sounds like a great thought. I'll definitely try not to use I - I somewhat dislike making totally objective statements in reviews (i.e. this the best best album of the year), so that's what I did it so frequently. Your point about "fanboyishness" makes sense - hadn't even considered that.
So thanks a lot of reviewing my review, haha. I'll definitely use what you said in my future reviews.